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Love the use of dissonance/chromaticism and the balance with pleasant chords that come in at 0:35. I'd use some changes in string textures at around 1:00 to give a sense of development that could make your piece able to go on for longer without getting boring.

+ Great contrast in the second section
+ Nice variety of orchestral tones used
+ Overall creates a unified emotion

- Could have a more varied chord progression
- I think the accompanying strings could be louder at the beginning. That harp sound really cuts through.
- The melody that comes in at 0:30 has a figure that repeats twice between 0:36 and 0:44. Changing one note in this section would give the melody more shape and might make a big difference to the overall sound given that it repeats a few times after that.

I enjoyed it!

DivoFST responds:

Thanks a lot for the comment Jack :D
Yeah i like to experiment with a lot of different things and orchestral is still very rusty, thanks for the advice :)

Nice feel to this track. It sounds like it does what it intends to! The issue I have is that the acoustic guitar is mixed quite badly into the overall sound, I think it needs re-recording, less reverb and to provide a harmony role when it's not the main part, instead of just appearing from nowhere. Or perhaps just pick a different sound from a VST and use that.
The rhythm is great, and the drums fit in really well. The ending is also perfect.

Really strong riffs here. By a minute in though I'm ready for more percussion and syncopation. Maybe some noise bursts or louder hi hats. Some crash cymbal would give some air as well. However I might just be ignorant of the genre! Like the way things gradually layer up towards the middle, at that point I'd chuck in something new to add variety, completely change the main riffs and underlying harmony.
Overall pretty solid but needs more variety.

XX-Technical-XX responds:

I can definitely understand that. Through going for floaty and airy, I agree with you in regards to the track lacking in some instrumental variety and deeper percussion. I will definitely keep those suggestions in mind

Like this right from the beginning. However I have serious doubts about the flute patch along with everything else. Maybe try a straight sine wave instead, with some vibrato/bend? That would keep a retro sound but not quite so.... old zelda games! Like how you vary the melody as well, but some more repetition would be good. The percussion and choice of sounds is excellent and gives a great sense of drama. All in all, a solid composition.

Jonicorn responds:

Thank you!
You think no flute, even where there are no "electric" instruments? If so, intresting :)
Yes I agree, I moved a bit to fast between the melodies. In my defense I was working fast to get this piece in Dreams of Splendor. But tis no excuse!
Well thanks so much for taking the time to review this!

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